In search of clear, precise writing
09/21/2010
useless words, vagueness, lack of development
https://docs.google.com/document/pub?id=1RJS2E2GmlrqYYJAFQBCKPnMcsrgFGa-Hs240IOo9kl4
09/20/2010
split infinitives, useless adverbs, awkward style
3/25/2010
Poor verb choice, lack of punctuation, and pronoun-antecedent errors can result in hilarious but embarrassing results.
https://docs.google.com/Doc?docid=0AdO1wSQ9FImjZGNucWN2NjRfMjIzZnI2cWZ3NWI&hl=en
3/22/2010
dangling modifier
http://docs.google.com/Doc?docid=0AdO1wSQ9FImjZGNucWN2NjRfNzRzeDdkNXZkaA&hl=en
3/9/2010
Like versus as; ending a sentence with a prpeosition
https://docs.google.com/Doc?docid=0AdO1wSQ9FImjZGNucWN2NjRfMjE1ZDRycndkY3Y&hl=en
3/4/2010
unclear reference impacts meaning
http://docs.google.com/Doc?docid=0AdO1wSQ9FImjZGNucWN2NjRfMTU2ZmczNWt2aGs&hl=en
3/2/2010
unclear reference
wordiness
This scene is ironic in that the original purpose of the banquet was to give Macbeth legitimacy as king, but the scene ends questioning it, leaving people wondering why he is king.
When Macbeth sees the ghost of Banquo sitting in his chair it represents the conflict that Macbeth has with killing Banquo and Duncan.
2/23/2010: Nominalizations 2
2/18/2010
Nominalization: A Symptom of The Vagues
2/16/2010
A Case of "The Vagues"
http://docs.google.com/Doc?docid=0AdO1wSQ9FImjZGNucWN2NjRfMjE0ZzU2ZDY3ZzY&hl=en
The cure for the vagues is intensive training in the levels of literary interpretation and a strong dose of irony.
2/1/2010
pronoun-antecedent agreement:
https://docs.google.com/Doc?docid=0AdO1wSQ9FImjZGNucWN2NjRfMjEyY2c1dHp4NGI&hl=en
11/17/2009
Higher levels of interpretation; analysis versus description
https://docs.google.com/Doc?docid=0AdO1wSQ9FImjZGNucWN2NjRfMjA1Y3d2ZzRxZGo&hl=en
11/12/2009
A good paragraph that relates the analysis to the work as a whole:
https://docs.google.com/Doc?docid=0AdO1wSQ9FImjZGNucWN2NjRfMjAzZGoyNWRxbjc&hl=en
10/21/2009
like as a conjuntion; ending a sentence with a preposition:
The substitute teacher did not let us out early like we were used to.
September 29, 2009
run on; coordination and subordination
http://docs.google.com/Doc?docid=0AdO1wSQ9FImjZGNucWN2NjRfMTg4YzgzOWI1Y3c&hl=en
September 25, 2009
Precise subject-verb unit = good, clear active sentence
http://docs.google.com/Doc?docid=0AdO1wSQ9FImjZGNucWN2NjRfMTg1NHdmNmRqZHo&hl=en
Unclear reference
http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=dcnqcv64_118fwwvjrgq
Misplaced modifier:
Experts suggest noise-reducing antimicrobial carpet appropriate for the classroom and activities, indirect lighting and dimmers for each classroom to lessen the sensitivity of the student’s eyes, and bathrooms to accommodate every child with wide stalls and automatic flush sensors.
Text rooted paragraph
The ghost of Hamlet's father compares the royal bed of Denmark to the control of the kingdom of Denmark, the king and queen. A “royal bed” implies the king and queen of Denmark and their control according to the decisions they make. The “royal bed” also implies power, wealth, and control. The ghost of Hamlet Sr. notes that the royal bed is of high importance and not a couch for incest (89-90). A couch connotes laziness, unimportance and relaxation. This is in fact the complete opposite of the royal bed. The king and queen, the royal bed, must not be lackadaisical towards the control of the kingdom. The royal bed is no place to fool around and enjoy the wealthy lifestyle without realizing the responsibilities and importance of their positions in the royal bed. A kingdom is no place for incest and the sinful marriage represented between Claudius and Gertrude, which the ghost of Hamlet Sr. refers to as damned incest (90). Hamlet should have been king if not for Claudius marriage to his mother. The irony here is that Hamlet is now using sinful means, such as killing, to knock of the king for his sinful duties. Denmark is now full with corruption and madness.
The ghost of Hamlet’s father compares the royal bed of Denmark to a couch for luxury and damned incest. The "royal bed" (89) of incest that Claudius is talking about is a metonymy for the marriage between his wife and his brother. A bed of any married couple is the place where children are made, and is supposed to be a sacred object. However, Hamlet’s father thinks that this new marriage will not birth children since he calls the bed "a couch for luxury and damned incest" (90) . Hamlet brings the synecdoche of bed as marriage to the next level and compares the marriage to Denmark. These two lines say so much about Claudius and Gertrude without mentioning their names at all. Ironically, the royal bed for Denmark could also be a metaphor for Hamlet himself, because it is where Hamlet came from, and he does not want himself to turn to the evil ways like his mother did.
2/19/09
Raymo essay random sample
http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=dcnqcv64_139fqmr74d3
2/20
You always need two hands:
A few years before the break of the new millennium, Chet Raymo discussed in the Commonweal the complex tension between theology and science. Ever since Galileo’s discoveries, the church finds science threatening to its beliefs as people pledge loyalty to scientific findings. On the other hand, science has been limited and criticized throughout the years because the church insists certain discoveries to be false or amoral.
2/24
A new word for his/her:
http://encarta.msn.com/encnet/Features/Columns/?article=DontHaveCow>1=27004
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